I’m currently working on a science fiction story that’s supposed to be a satire of TESCREAL and a celebration of the people who are fighting it. I’d be interested to pitch my plot idea to some people and see what they think. I’m still working on the details, but it would be a post-apocalyptic setting set after a group of mad scientist types took control of world governments and set off a bio-weapon to “improve” people’s genetics, but ended up turning almost everyone into horrific mutants (which they insist was their intention because they are so unwilling to admit their failures). It follows the story of a group of heroes (among the few unaffected by the bio-weapon) bent on overthrowing these leaders and establishing new governments free of eugenicist violence.
I’d like to gauge for interest here, and if you want to hear some of my working concepts here, feel free to DM me or ask in the comments.
My thinking-about-this-for-ten-seconds take is this:
In general, a good satire should have no heroes.
First off, the villains of your story sound like the archetypal mad scientists with questionable ethics that have been a part of culture for centuries. It doesn’t have the kind of specificity that would lead readers to draw parallels to the actual people or groups whose worldviews you’re trying to satirize.
On a broader level, I also don’t think that the story you’ve described in the post conveys the message you want it to. The idea of people setting out to accomplish a goal, but then failing at it in a way that produces unintended negative consequences, does not, on its own, make the point that the goal was bad. The reason eugenics is bad is not because altering the human genome might produce horrible mutants. So if you want your anti-eugenics message to hit harder than that, then you should change the focus of the story to expose the actual flaws in the thinking that motivates eugenics (e.g. that some humans are inherently superior to others, etc.)