Flashback time:
One of the most important and beneficial trainings I ever underwent as a young writer was trying to script a comic. I had to cut down all of my dialogue to fit into speech bubbles. I was staring closely at each sentence and striking out any word I could.
“But then I paid for Twitter!”
everything else aside, why would you describe a bookshelf as stacked to the brim. what brim
The brim of the bookshelves’ hat. You see, wizard bookshelves have hats formed like fedoras < … insert 6,000 words of impromptu worldbuilding here … >
AKCHUALLY these are muggle bookshelves
I didn’t suffer through all these chapters wishing for the payoff that never lived just to let Dr. Verres get slandered with a possession worth being interested in.
Whoops missed it was the second sentence, where I presume Hariezier has not actually arrived at Hogwarts. For some reason I assumed it was the interior of Dumbledore’s study.